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post #1 of 4 (permalink) Old 12-07-2008, 04:11 AM Thread Starter
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Poetry...need's work

here's what i have so far.

fill me in on where i should go with it.
all ideas are welcome.

opening the darkness to the light.
shiny bit's fill's the eyes.
a flip of a switch is abated through the remaining darkness,filled with the growl of a beast long wanting.
machine and flesh.
a union of satisfaction.
backdrop of white leaves me daunted........
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its good, i'm not a poetic guy so my input is worthless

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post #3 of 4 (permalink) Old 12-09-2008, 12:44 AM
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i am even less of a poetic guy so i didn't make it past line 1. wish i could be more help bud, but i never paid attention during poetry and really never "got" it.

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I am a poetic learner and oftentimes take guidance with the online magazine such as Do My Dissertation For Me to make my skills better. According to my views, it's good poetry. Try to use proverbs to make it look more good.
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