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post #1 of 3 (permalink) Old 12-07-2008, 03:11 AM Thread Starter
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Poetry...need's work

here's what i have so far.

fill me in on where i should go with it.
all ideas are welcome.


opening the darkness to the light.
shiny bit's fill's the eyes.
a flip of a switch is abated through the remaining darkness,filled with the growl of a beast long wanting.
machine and flesh.
a union of satisfaction.
backdrop of white leaves me daunted........

Fear is the mind-killer.
Fear is the little-death that brings total obliteration.
I will face my fear.
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its good, i'm not a poetic guy so my input is worthless

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post #3 of 3 (permalink) Old 12-08-2008, 11:44 PM
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i am even less of a poetic guy so i didn't make it past line 1. wish i could be more help bud, but i never paid attention during poetry and really never "got" it.




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